Today we were doing some collaborative writing based on a picture of an old leaf. We had finished our discussion and drafted a short description of the leaf together. The children had buddied up and were working on their own descriptions. After a wee while I noticed a cluster of kids in animated conversation around the TV. On walking on over I was told that they thought the writing had a weak beginning and they were fighting over how to improve it!!
lol!! This is what they eventually came up with!
A Leaf.
The leaf swishes around in the air, moved by the wind. It looks like a golden queen's crown that is fragile and delicate like glass. The dead leaf has lots of different shades of brown. It looks rotten and easy to crunch. It rattles constantly in the wind and flutters gently in my hand like a butterfly. When the leaf falls to the ground, it slowly starts to crack along its veins.
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